This is my first Comic Script, and I am attaching the first page of the story. I have send the story to Tinkle, so the rest is up to them.
PAGE ONE
1. Caption: It seems like a regular day in Ram Vilas Hotel, but today things are going to be slightly different.
An inside view of the Ram Vilas Hotel is shown. The view shows a lady, around her 30’s, taking a sip of her coffee, while reading a big novel. In a really traditional looking hotel, there are very few customers apart from this lady. And at the end of the hotel, close to the door, stands the waiter, near the cashier, both of them staring at the lady.
Waiter: I just don’t understand! It is the third coffee she’s having and it’s 12 in the noon! Doesn’t she want anything to eat?
Cashier: Does it even matter? Maybe she doesn’t have enough money for it.
We can also see two people having a heated discussion a bit far away from the table of the lady. Both are elegantly dressed, as can be said from the far view.
2. A CU of the two men, and the lady sipping her coffee can be seen a bit far away from their table. The oldest among them is wearing a spectacle, and donning a mysterious smile on his face. The other is elegantly suited, and has bit tension on his face.
Young Man: So you’re not going to lower the price?
Old Man: I got many eligible students out there, and I am giving this seat to you at a price. I am just quoting it. It is up to you now.
3. The backside of the old man’s head is on the CU, and over the shoulder the young man can be seen, trying to negotiate with the old man.
Young Man: But 50 lakhs is too big a sum!
Old Man: Hey, do you want a seat for your son or not?
Young man: But if I pay that, what is the guarantee that he will be out as a doctor?
4. Side view of the old man, right side to be precise. At this view, the lady drinking her coffee can be seen. The young man is not in view.
Old Man: I am the Dean of the college. I can make people win and lose by simply penning it down. You leave the money in my account and the boy with me, and he will be a doctor, no matter what.
5. Side view of the young man, left side to be precise. At this view, the lady can be seen at the same posture as the earlier scene. This strip is the other half of the earlier strip. So here the old man is not in view.
Young man: And what about the merit student? Won’t he try to claim his so called rights for education?
Old Man: You can leave all that to me. It is my headache, and I will handle it. Five years from now your son will be a doctor in your hospital.
6. Half size view of the young man, with his hand on his chin. A light grin on his face. The tension is gone.
Young Man: So 50 lakhs every year, and I get the results?
7. Half size view of the old man, with a wide grin.
Old Man: My word can be taken for it. So is it a deal?
8. Two hands are shown shaking over the table, and at a far sight we can see the lady having her sip of coffee.
Young Man: It is a deal I will not regret.
PAGE ONE
1. Caption: It seems like a regular day in Ram Vilas Hotel, but today things are going to be slightly different.
An inside view of the Ram Vilas Hotel is shown. The view shows a lady, around her 30’s, taking a sip of her coffee, while reading a big novel. In a really traditional looking hotel, there are very few customers apart from this lady. And at the end of the hotel, close to the door, stands the waiter, near the cashier, both of them staring at the lady.
Waiter: I just don’t understand! It is the third coffee she’s having and it’s 12 in the noon! Doesn’t she want anything to eat?
Cashier: Does it even matter? Maybe she doesn’t have enough money for it.
We can also see two people having a heated discussion a bit far away from the table of the lady. Both are elegantly dressed, as can be said from the far view.
2. A CU of the two men, and the lady sipping her coffee can be seen a bit far away from their table. The oldest among them is wearing a spectacle, and donning a mysterious smile on his face. The other is elegantly suited, and has bit tension on his face.
Young Man: So you’re not going to lower the price?
Old Man: I got many eligible students out there, and I am giving this seat to you at a price. I am just quoting it. It is up to you now.
3. The backside of the old man’s head is on the CU, and over the shoulder the young man can be seen, trying to negotiate with the old man.
Young Man: But 50 lakhs is too big a sum!
Old Man: Hey, do you want a seat for your son or not?
Young man: But if I pay that, what is the guarantee that he will be out as a doctor?
4. Side view of the old man, right side to be precise. At this view, the lady drinking her coffee can be seen. The young man is not in view.
Old Man: I am the Dean of the college. I can make people win and lose by simply penning it down. You leave the money in my account and the boy with me, and he will be a doctor, no matter what.
5. Side view of the young man, left side to be precise. At this view, the lady can be seen at the same posture as the earlier scene. This strip is the other half of the earlier strip. So here the old man is not in view.
Young man: And what about the merit student? Won’t he try to claim his so called rights for education?
Old Man: You can leave all that to me. It is my headache, and I will handle it. Five years from now your son will be a doctor in your hospital.
6. Half size view of the young man, with his hand on his chin. A light grin on his face. The tension is gone.
Young Man: So 50 lakhs every year, and I get the results?
7. Half size view of the old man, with a wide grin.
Old Man: My word can be taken for it. So is it a deal?
8. Two hands are shown shaking over the table, and at a far sight we can see the lady having her sip of coffee.
Young Man: It is a deal I will not regret.
